Wondertwinc wants commentary on: “Oh yes, I see why you are his,” he whispered not unlike a man admiring a work of art. Belle could only think about remembering to breathe deep and slow. He tilted his head, his dark hair brushing his shoulders. His voice, velvety and intimate wrapped around her like a ribbon, “What are you, I wonder?”
Belle had not the presence of mind to answer, so fallen beneath whatever spell his voice was casting. But as luck would have it, she did not need to.
Two warm hands rested on Belle’s shoulders from behind, “She is mine.”
The heat of a presence both powerful and ancient pressed at her back, and Belle’s eyes slid closed in gratefulness. Sighing softly, she resisted the urge to lean back into the welcome warmth.
Rumpelstiltskin held her gently but firm, his touch searing through the simple fabric of her dress. His thumbs created circles behind her shoulders, deliberately careful movements.
“Loki, you little shit” was my catchphrase writing this entire godforsaken chapter. I kept wanting to GO GO GO, and had to repeatedly force myself to slow down. I was so excited by the idea that my enthusiasm almost washed Belle out at first! I didn’t think it would ever work.
I like this moment because this was kind of my ODE TO FAMOUS VILLAINS. Most villains, but Loki especially, have a superiority complex, but that never works with Belle. Things like that just cease to exist when they come into contact with her. She wasn’t so much intimidated by another magical being as she was curious about another as powerful, or moreso, than Rumpelstiltskin. This is a guy who just appeared in the Dark One’s dining room, and for Belle, as someone who’s always heard the rumors about Rumpelstiltskin and how powerful his magic is, it floors her a little bit.
Likewise, Loki doesn’t care for humans. I mean, that’s canon. It’s not that he’s attracted to Belle here, not even a little bit. If anything, he’s baffled. He feels like he’s missing something. What would Rumpelstiltskin want with a human? Especially a non-magical one. I think Loki, as confident as he appears, is more wary than Belle is. He figures that she’s being kept around for a reason because of some talent like shape-shifting or something. She could be a banshee that sucks out souls, for all he knows.
Either way, he definitely knows that she’s (supposedly) serving some kind of purpose there, otherwise Rumple wouldn’t keep her around. His line of thinking is very black and white on that subject. If Rumpelstiltskin’s weakness is feeling too much, Loki’s is not understanding HOW to feel, much less WHAT to feel. He just knows intimidate and conquer.
This story, but specifically this chapter made me realize how important authenticity is. If I can’t hear a character say words or see them doing things, I can’t write it because it would be dishonest. I’m a pretty straightforward person, myself, so if I can be convinced, I’m fairly certain most people can. With Loki, part of slowing down my writing really helped me to hear and see things he would say and do, and I think that really made this successful.
There’s actually another moment somewhere in this story where Belle is carrying a tea tray, and I had to force myself to take a deep breath and just thought, “Steady.” I was saying it both to myself and Belle. It was pretty awesome, because it was a defining moment for me as a writer.
There was a kind of blooper reel outside of this chapter, about what would happen if Thor showed up looking for Loki and he befriended Belle because he’d heard things Loki had said about her. It was pretty funny. I know it definitely involved them drinking, with Thor regaling Belle of stories of hard-won fights and adventures. He joked a lot about her size, too.